Writing Activity 4

Write a paragraph where you explain how to install a program in your computer.

Correction 1: Internal Evaluation

The messages that convey Americans music videos to their viewers.

Nowadays the music videos are used to transmit messages to the people, but these messages aren´t educational. The music videos can have influence in American people, specially in the teenagers because they are going through a phase of trying new things and rebellion. The music videos show violence, drugs, sex and partying all the time. The American people are trying to be like the music stars because these stars represent the success because they are in a good place without any problem (seemingly). So when the people watch their favorite music star in a video with a gun and it seems like all the people respect them, the viewers will want that the people respect them too so they will buy a gun and maybe they will shoot someone who disrespects them. The music videos show that the violence is the only way to solve the problems but that is not the real life, the violence in the US is a serious problem. The music videos are like the movies; you kill someone and no one notes this is fake but the viewers catch this message. The use of drugs is another message of the music videos, the videos of hip-hop, electronic,and techno, show tha the use of drugs is cool. It´s the same thing like in the violence, the music stars appear in the videos consuming drugs, drinking alcohol and it seems like they are having a good thing, everybody has a good time, but in the real life the drugs destroy you; the alcohol too and it isn´t a good way to have a good time. The people don´t know this, the American people only want to be like the stars in the videos, and they don’t see the consequences of acting like in the music videos. The is the same situation, the music videos convey having sex with everybody it´s a cool thing and all the people do it. If you don´t have sex you're nobody, that is the messages that the music videos convey. The sex is a big problem in American society; the diseases are very easy to get through sex and these diseases can kill. But this is one part of the problem of having sex, the other part is pregnancy. Many young women’s needs to leave the school and stars work because they have a baby and they need to keep. Maybe it was just a moment of madness and satisfaction at a party, only sex without feelings, but this sex at the party brings a baby and responsibilities to the women and the men. The music videos messages is in part responsible that the American society have many people that consume drugs, that have a lot of violence and that many people are infected with a diseases sex and the reason that many teenagers women get pregnant. Because shows that the violence, drugs and sex are something enjoyable, pleasurable; something that is fashionable but is a fantasy life.

Review

The messages that convey Americans music videos to their viewers.

Nowadays the music videos it(are) uses(used) to transmit messages to the people, but this(these) messages aren´t educational. The music videos can have influence in American people, special(specially) in the teenagers because they are going through a phase of trying new things and rebellion. The music videos show violence, drugs, sex and party(partying) all the time. The American people are trying to be like the music stars because these stars represent the success because they are in a good place without any problem (seemingly). So when the people watch their favorite music star in a video with a gun and this(it) seems like all the people respect them, the viewers will want that the people respect them too so they will going to buy a gun and maybe they will shoot someone to(who) disrespect(disrespects) them. The music videos show that the violence is the only way to solve the problems but that is not the real life, the violence in the American’s laws it´s (US is) a seriously(serious) problem. The music videos are like the movies; you kill someone and no one note(notes this is fake but) and the viewer’s(viewers) catch this message. The uses(use of) drugs is another message of the music videos, the videos of hip-hop, electronic,(and) techno, show that (the) use (of) drugs it´s(is) cool. It´s the same thing like in the violence, the music stars appear in the videos consuming drugs, drinking alcohol and they(it) seems like is(they are having) a good thing, everybody have(has) a good time, but in the real life the drugs destroy you(;) the alcohol too and (it) isn´t (a) good way to have a good time. The people don´t know this, the American people only wants(want to) be like the stars in the videos, and they don’t see the consequence(consequences) of acting like in the music videos. The sex it´s(is) the same situation, the music videos convey have(having) sex with everybody it´s a cool thing and all the people do it. If you don´t have sex you're nobody, that is the messages that the music videos convey. The sex is a big problem in American society; the diseases are very easy to get through sex and these diseases can kill. But this is one part of the problem of having sex, the other part is pregnancy. Many young women’s needs to leave the school and stars work because they have a baby and they need to keep. Maybe it was just a moment of madness and satisfaction at a party, only sex without feelings, but this sex at the party brings a baby and responsibilities to the women and the men. The music videos messages is in part responsible that the American society have many people that consume drugs, that have a lot of violence and that many people are infected with a diseases sex and the reason that many teenagers women get pregnant. Because shows that the violence, drugs and sex are something enjoyable, pleasurable; something that is fashionable but is a fantasy life.

Internal Evaluation

The messages that convey Americans music videos to their viewers.

Nowadays the music videos it uses to transmit messages to the people, but this messages aren´t educational. The music videos can have influence in American people, special in the teenagers because they are going through a phase of trying new things and rebellion. The music videos show violence, drugs, sex and party all the time. The American people are trying to be like the music stars because these stars represent the success because they are in a good place without any problem (seemingly). So when the people watch their favorite music star in a video with a gun and this seems like all the people respect them, the viewers will want that the people respect them too so they will going to buy a gun and maybe they will shoot someone to disrespect them. The music videos show that the violence is the only way to solve the problems but that is not the real life, the violence in the American’s laws it´s a seriously problem. The music videos are like the movies; you kill someone and no one note and the viewer’s catch this message. The uses drugs is another message of the music videos, the videos of hip-hop, electronic, techno, show that use drugs it´s cool. It´s the same thing like in the violence, the music stars appear in the videos consuming drugs, drinking alcohol and they seems like is a good thing, everybody have a good time, but in the real life the drugs destroy you the alcohol too and isn´t good way to have a good time. The people don´t know this, the American people only wants be like the stars in the videos, and they don’t see the consequence of acting like in the music videos. The sex it´s the same situation, the music videos convey have sex with everybody it´s a cool thing and all the people do it. If you don´t have sex you're nobody, that is the messages that the music videos convey. The sex is a big problem in American society; the diseases are very easy to get through sex and these diseases can kill. But this is one part of the problem of having sex, the other part is pregnancy. Many young women’s needs to leave the school and stars work because they have a baby and they need to keep. Maybe it was just a moment of madness and satisfaction at a party, only sex without feelings, but this sex at the party brings a baby and responsibilities to the women and the men. The music videos messages is in part responsible that the American society have many people that consume drugs, that have a lot of violence and that many people are infected with a diseases sex and the reason that many teenagers women get pregnant. Because shows that the violence, drugs and sex are something enjoyable, pleasurable; something that is fashionable but is a fantasy life.

Internal Evaluation

Post the script of your Internal Evaluation (recording).

Correction 1: iPhone 4 Descriptive Paragraph

Nowadays the iPhone 4 has many features that make it one of the best smartphones in the world; these characteristics are the touch screen, the two cameras, the sizes and the interface. The touch screen is a technological characteristic in the iPhone 4 because it responds only to finger touch. The touch screen allows us move and interact with the content in the screen. We can increase or decrease the zoom when you visit web pages. Because of this, we can enjoy more the games that we can have in the Iphone 4. The two cameras that the iPhone 4 has are an innovation. The frontal camera (front-facing) allows to do video calling with a resolution VGA, and the back camera (rear-facing) has a 5 megapixel camera integrated with a LED flash. The rear-facing camera is capable of recording HD video of 720p and 30fps (frames per second). Both cameras make use of the tap to focus feature. Besides; the iPhone has a very good size that is confortable for the user. The screen has a size of 3.5in, the cellphone´s dimensions are 4.54in (long) x 2.309in (wide) x 0.37in (deep). Moreover, the cellphone has an excellent interface that makes it easy to use and enjoyable. The interface has a good menu that is simple to understand and to use; it also has a lot of indications and feedbacks that ensure us that we are doing the correct things. In conclusion, the iPhone 4 is one of the best smartphones in the world because it has many features like touch screen, the two cameras, the perfect sizes and the friendly interface that make that the user prefers it.

Review

Nowaday(Nowadays) the iPhone 4 has many features that make it one of the best smartphones in the world(,)(;) this(these)characteristics are the touch screen, the two cameras, the sizes and the interface. The touch screen are(is) a technological characteristic in the iPhone 4 because (it) respons(responds) only to finger touch. The touch screen make(allows) us move and interact with the content in the screen. We can increase or decrease the zoom when you visit web pages. Because of this, we can enjoy more the games that we can have in the Iphone 4. The two cametas(cameras) that have the iPhone 4 (has) are an invention(innovation). The frontal camera (front-facing) has maked(allows) to do video calling with a resolution VGA, and the back camera (rear-facing) has (a) 5 megapixel camera integrated with an(a) LED flash. The rear-facing camera is capable of recording HD video in(of) 720p at(and) 30(fps) (frames per second). Both cameras make use of the tap to focus feature. Besides; the iPhone has a very good size that are(is) confortable to(for) the user(,)(.) the(The) screen has a size (of) 3.5in, the cellphone´s dimentions(dimensions) are 4.54in (long) x 2.309in (wide) x 0.37in (deep). Moreover, the cellphone has an excellent(excellent) interface that makes (it) east(easy) to use and enjoyable. The interface has a good menu that is simple to undestand(understand) and to use(,)(;) (it also) has a lot of indications and feedbacks that ensure us that we are doing the correct things. In conlusion(conclusion), the iPhone 4 is one of the best smartphones in the world because (it) has many features like touch screen, the two cameras, the (perfect) sizes and the (friendly) interface(;) that make that the user prefers it.

iPhone 4 descriptive paragraph

Nowaday the iPhone 4 has many features that make it one of the best smartphones in the world, this characteristics are the touch screen, the two cameras,the sizes and the interface. The touch screen are a technological characteristic in the iPhone 4 because respons only to finger touch. The touch screen make us move and interact with the content in the screen. We can increase or decrease the zoom when you visit web pages. Because of this, we can enjoy more the games that we can have in the Iphone 4. The two cametas that have the iPhone 4 are an invention. The frontal camera (front-facing) has maked to do video calling with a resolution VGA, and the back camera (rear-facing) has 5 megapixel camera integrated with an LED flash. The rear-facing camera is capable of recording HD video in 720p at 30 frames per second. Both cameras make use of the tap to focus feature. Besides; the iPhone has a very good size that are confortable to the user, the screen has a size 3.5in, the cellphone´s dimentions are 4.54in x 2.309in x 0.37in. Moreover, the cellphone has an excelent interface that makes east to use and enjoyable. The interface has a good menu that is simple to undestand and to use, has a lot of indications and feedbacks that ensure us that we are doing the correct things. In conlusion, the iPhone 4 is one of the best smartphones in the world because has many features like touch screen, the two cameras,the sizes and the interface; that make that the user prefers it.